Yes (submissive version)

Back when we wrote this story I had a first draft of the following sex scene which I thought was hot, but it didn't really fit with Max' character, painting her way too submissive (which shouldn't happen this early in the story) so I rewrote the scene into what you guys have already read. However, since it is still kinda hot (I hope you guys agree) I'd post the "outtake" anyway for your enjoyment... First part is the same, with the blowjob it changes more to a dom-sub-tone than the other version. The actual sex, which I'll post in the second thread, has the same outcome as the other version, so after the sex scene I'll try and link it back into the story.

Hope you guys enjoy!

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It took all of what was left of Max's willpower to pull his hand from her pants, then she pushed the man in front of her forcing him to move. With her hand still lightly wrapped around Darren's she pulled him through the crowd, forcing her way through, pushing and shoving each body ignoring the calls of anger until she hit the back door.

The door swung open loudly, and Max stomped out with Darren in tow. The sky was overcast, the air thick with humidity. A late summer rain storm had rolled through the Pacific Northwest, the rain had let up, but the streets were still damp and muddy. Max looked around and got her bearings then looked down the ally in the direction of Darren's apartment.

Crash had never been in a good part of town, but as Max dragged Darren through the street she could smell the city getting worse around her. She stopped a little more than a block away from Crash. She could still see the bar's neon light flickering.

Darren opened the door.

Unlocked. Always a great sign, they went up a single flight of stars that led up to the middle floor of the three storied building. He pulled out keys unlocking the door to his apartment; he kicked the door three times before it finally seemed to open.

Max followed him through, she remembered the place. She had spent many a nights here after Crash. It was easier to just sleep there. Better than dealing with the sector checkpoint that separated her own apartment and her workplace frequented bar. Last time she had been here he was sharing the place with two other guys. Taking her leather jacket off, she carelessly dropped it onto the dirty floor.

“You still live here with-”

“Shutup,” Darren said before pulling her into a kiss. He was strong, forceful. He didn't give her an option instead pushing her into his room. Max let him take control until the back of her legs hit his bed. He pulled his lips from hers then pushed her down so she was sitting on his bed staring up at him

“You always liked it rough, didn't you,” He had a giant grin on his face. His hands worked quickly pulling his belt open, then his jeans. He pulled out his semi hard cock. Max looked at it, then up to him.

This was actually happening. She wrapped a single hand and around his shaft, her fingers squeezing him slightly before she looked back up at his face. His head was thrown back and he was moaning. Leaning forward she tasted him with her tongue letting the underside of his head slide across the top of her tongue. Her lips pursed she kissed his cock before sliding half of his glands into her mouth.

She sucked softly and Darren groaned. With one hand she slowly began stroking him, her mouth working the sensitive head of his cock. She swirled her tongue under him, then dragged her lips up and down. His hips jerked forward and his hands tangled into her hair.

“God, you're good at this,” He moaned, and pulled on her head **** to shove his cock down her throat. Max didn’t resist, instead she pinched her eyes shut and did her best to relax her neck as Darren pushed forward. For a second the bulbous head of his dick pressed against the back of her mouth, almost making her gag on his meat, but then he found the tiny opening and pushed inside.

Darren growled and clenched his teeth as inch after inch of his cock disappeared between Max’ full lips. How he had missed this! Missed having this beautiful girl kneeling in front of him, skillfully servicing his dick with her mouth. “Goddamnit,” Darren hissed, his grip on her curls tightening even more when he felt her dainty nose press against his pubic bone. It felt amazing!

“Oh, you little slut!” he hissed as he held her head firmly in place and slowly began to move his hips back and forth, beginning to fuck her face.

Max muttered something inaudible against his cock and grabbed his hips to get a little control over the pace of the blowjob, only to have Darren slap her hands away. “No hands!” he grunted and gave her throat an especially hard thrust to give his words reinforcement, making Max gag slightly. Doing her best to comply she crossed her wrists behind her back allowing him to proceed.

Even though she wasn’t really sure how she had ended up like this, in her douchebag-ex-boyfriend’s shitty apartment, sucking him off like a whore, she felt better than she had any time in the last couple of days. Her mind was taken off Logan and their stupid relationship; instead she was enjoying a good buzz and allowed herself to satisfy her desires, letting herself admit: she was horny!

She felt the drool run down from the corners of her mouth over her chin, dribbling onto her shirt, felt the hard cement floor bite into her knees as she cowered in front of Darryl, felt his balls slap against her chin with every thrust as he fucked her mouth like it was a pussy.

“Look at me, Max!” Darren ordered, his heart pumping hard in his chest.

Slowly Max opened her eyes and looked up. Darren had to concentrate not to cum right there. It was beautiful! Big, dark doe-eyes, filled with lust, slightly red from the night of drinking, slightly watered up from the facefucking he laid upon her. Grunting Darren shoved his whole length down her throat, then held her head tight, forcing her to keep him lodged in her windpipe. After a few seconds he felt her gag, the **** contractions of her neck massaging his cock amazingly. Tears welled up in her eyes when he let her go and she fell backwards, coughing and spluttering uncontrollably.

Instead of giving the girl a break Darren wrapped her curls even tighter around his fist and tilted her face up, then he grabbed his spit-slick member firmly around the base and began slapping it all over Max’ pretty features, enjoying the rush of dominance he got from it. “Lick my balls!” he demanded.

After a second of hesitation Max slowly stuck her little, pink tongue out and tentatively lapped at his scrotum, covering it with saliva before gently sucking one of his testicles into her warm mouth, all the while squinting against the cock which still was slapped into her face. “Good girl,” Darren groaned before he suddenly yanked her up into a standing position by her hair, making her yelp.