No Response Again So Let's Go And Try To Do More This Time You Lazy Bi-

"Alright we're back and for those in the know, yes we have been doing this read from the Tower's version of hell!" Dahlia says as she takes her seat at the table.

"Not my choice, I might add," Alide says as she begrudgingly sits at the uncomfortable table.

"Oh what pray tell would be your choice?" Dahlia asks as she leans an elbow on the table and rests her chin in her hand.

"Somewhere where the table I'm sitting at won't stab me?" Alide suggests.

"You're just too soft... Anyway where were we? Goblin fucking? I think it was Goblin fucking?" Dahlia asks.

"Actually we had just finished some Orc fucking and food eating, so we're continuing from the post called 'Mata' which is the name of the goblin so there may in fact be more goblin fucking coming up..." Alide states with a dismissive wave of her hand at the end. Conceding the point.

"Ha yep... Naughty goblin is giving our dear Arthur a sumptuous blowjob under the table as he talks with Kira. The description is pretty on point too. Definitely kind of hot. Normally intercut sex like this is pretty badly done, but it's actually done pretty well here. The sex being kept fairly light, just hinted at with tantalizing, teasing mentions as the scene goes on," Dahlia explains as she licks her lips.

"Normally I'd comment that my dear sister could get off to someone mashing barbie dolls together, but in this case she's correct. This scene is actually pretty hot and as it goes on, Kira, unaware of Mata's actions decides to enjoy some sex with Arthur as well and just as Arthur releases in Mata's throat, Kira finds out what's happening this is a tense and dramatic scene! What's going to happen now! Well... It would be if we didn't know for a fact that Arthur could just mind control Kira into not being upset... Mind control is fun as a fetish, but I do find this is where it sort of fails as a narrative at least... usually. I'm prejudging this as I haven't went to the next page, but I wanted to get this out here regardless of whether this story is an example or not," Alide says and Dahlia rolls her eyes, unbothered by the comment about her lack of standards, but seemingly annoyed by the obvious incoming lecture.

"A story where the main character has complete control over every other character in the story either has no stakes or has an idiot plot. At least if suitable limitations or a suitable antagonizing **** aren't set up which... while him being required to touch them is kind of one, it's a pretty weak one, especially in a scenario like this, I'm not saying it wouldn't ever be a problem, but it's less of a problem. Now there are of course other ways this could go... the narrative could be person vs self, there might be no external conflict that isn't easily resolved, but the protagonist in this case Arthur might struggle morally with his actions or as this one might be setting up Arthur might end up in conflict with the source of his power as the mind in the ring clearly has its own goals. Oh and by idiot plot I mean there might be stakes if Arthur just decides randomly not to use his power to solve all his problems when he obviously could," Alide lectures.

"You done?" Dahlia asks.

"Yes?" Alide says hesitating slightly as she decides whether she has more to add.

"Great anyway yeah the next chapter, the problem is barely even a problem as even without his intervention it seems like it might have resulted in them both just deciding to fuck him, but he immediately puts them in a trance. Even the ring thinks he's being stupid and should have just let them fight over him and I agree with it,"

"There is also a spelling mistake here or grammar mistake... Kira thinks that Arthur is the sexiest 'men' she'd ever seen instead of man... Unless there's a bunch of Arthur suddenly... Also the chapter end question literally says 'How does he fix it' and the answering chapter is 'with magic' so you know... everything I just said..." Alide says with a wave of her hand.

"So, we do learn there are some limitations... He cannot rewrite their personalities with ease... That doesn't mean he can't he just has to be more careful about it, so... not really a wall as just a reason why Arthur needs to be more manipulative with his mind control. Okay. Also the ring also comments on how annoying being constantly wet is, in this case in terms of how often they'll need to change underwear," Dahlia says, "which as of certain previous statements no longer being canon, is a pain I know all too well"

"Not... sure about how I feel about the fact Arthur seemingly just changed Kira's sexuality, or potentially just made her realize her own sexuality... The story is intentionally unclear so far, but yeah so with a bit of clever manipulation he makes it so Kira is okay with sharing him with Mata and also makes Kira sexually attracted to Mata... I feel like the two of them potentially doing stuff together without him would conflict with earlier orders, but I do not care enough to actually go back and check if there were any previous orders specifically against doing stuff with others," Alide says.

"Ha ha... Okay so now we're adding specific power dynamics since seemingly Kira has defaulted to submission since in terms of job hierarchy he is actually her boss, so now he's making it official. I feel like I should make a #MeToo joke here, but not sure if that would be in good taste?" Dahlia says looking thoughtful.

"Since when have you cared about good taste," Alide asks.

"Good point," Dahlia acknowledges and opens her mouth to speak.

"Regardless cutting you off there and moving on to the next chapter," Alide interrupts and Dahlia looks surprised and then sulks as Alide continues, "So, now it's time to input even more brainwashing in the tiny goblin head"

"So, first he just makes sure she's okay with the latest kinkiness he's added to the relationship then decides he can find and bring forth all their deepest darkest desires and learns that Mata wants to be bred... which..." Dahlia peters off for a bit and Alide giggles.

"Are you also thinking about a certain other pregnant goblin?" she asks.

Dahlia nods, "yeah... Goblins just make perfect breeding machines, huh?" she answers.

"Okay so now he has a sub **** orc lady and a breeding pet goblin size queen... Quite the interesting harem he's building here. Hope he has plans for all the kids he's going to have as a result of this though," Alide says, "I mean unless the plan is like... impregnate and then abort or put up for adoption every one of Mata's kids... I mean I know Kira is also pregnant due to the ring's machinations and the ring was probably going to impregnate Mata somehow eventually anyway, but Arthur doesn't know about whatever plans the ring has and has just seemingly without thought of consequences agreed to help Mata pump out little gobbos. I just hope he's ready for that," Alide continues.

"I doubt it will actually end up coming up honestly. There's going to be impregnation fetish stuff, but never any actual conversation about her giving birth or what happens to her kids, watch..." Dahlia says.

"Is that a prediction for our story as well?" Alide ventures and Dahlia grins by way of answer and Alide chuckles, "How long do you think it will be before Lehe just completely forgets Goma is pregnant?"

"If I wasn't speaking the words right this moment I'd assume she already had," Dahlia responds.

"You people have no faith in me..."

"I mean you wrote us to be this way so..." Dahlia responds to the author's intrusion before sliding perfectly naturally back into the read in a masterful bit of narrative genius, "anyway, after the mind control, Arthur then fucks both of them,"

"The scene is fine... no real issues, although 'Is that good sir?' should have a comma between the good and sir... I can't remember if this mistake had been made earlier, but comma's should be placed before any sort of address... like for example if I was to say 'you are a wanton slut, Dahlia '" Alide says, "I'd put a comma after slut, because I am addressing Dahlia, by name," Alide explains.

"And title..." Dahlia purrs with a grin.

"Also... I'm struggling to tell if it's wrong or just reads weird, but 'Arthur guided Mata's hips' is a sentence all on it's own and while looking at it it seems like a perfectly serviceable sentence, it fits wrong in my mouth trying to read it in context," Alide continues, ignoring Dahlia's words.

"You know what fits weird in my mou-" Dahlia starts as she leans towards Alide.

"-anyway after that sex scene we have... Another!" Alide interrupts her. Dahlia sighs.

"Fucking prude... Anyway, nice joke with working in the chapter title there, but yeah... there is immediately another sex scene... It's kind of gone from narrative with sex, to full on porno for these chapters, huh?" Dahlia says clearly intending the statement as a compliment.

"Indeed... Also. Without giving you the context, since the context does make it apparent eventually... I dare anyone reading this to guess who is saying the lines in this fragment '“Lick me clean.” She shuddered. “Yes sir.”' I am not being cruel and withholding context such as in dialogue directions, just scenario context, that is all we get in regards to who is speaking these lines. Now... with context it is after a few seconds of thought at most, clear that it's Arthur and then Kira speaking, but that is not made clear in the writing and the she shuddered seems like it's part of the dialogue direction for the lick me clean line doesn't it?" Alide argues.

"You get hung up on the weirdest things sometimes," Dahlia giggles.

"actually... Given this line near the end of the chapter 'The sounds of panting and sucking and fucking filled the apartment.' I'm starting to think the problem might just be that the author wrote this chapter one handed and in a bit of a rush as it were..." Alide responds, "there's kind of just an all around minor quality drop during this sex scene..."

"No shame in jacking off to your own work, but try not to let it impact your quality," Dahlia advises.

"The sex scene ends and we jump forward to Arthur waking up presumably the next morning after a long night of sexy fun-" Alide starts and is cut off,

"-which apparently isn't over as when he wakes up Mata is asleep, but Kira is just going to town on his cock with her mouth!" Dahlia says excitedly.

"Yes... So Arthur cums again and decides to go to work, but laments, in another bit of dialogue that gives no written indication who is speaking, that he has no clothes to change into since he's not at home. Kira suggests that they just skip work for the day, but Arthur turns her down and both go into work, Arthur heaidng to his home first and noting that he doesn't have a change of clothes anyway since his increased size means none of his previous clothes except what he had been wearing at the time of the change fit, which is a nice detail," Alide notes.

"So arriving at work the chapter ends with Arthur finding someone waiting in his office... Who is it, let's find o-" Dahlia starts and then immediately cuts herself off, "- ah the answer chapter name just says it's his boss..." she finishes seeming disappointed.

"So... this chapter starts by giving us her name and indirectly explains that she is in fact the nameless tiefling from earlier if we weren't sure. Other than that this chapter mostly just gives us some new information about how Arthur's powers work. Mostly that his physical change is noticeable, but that something about the magic makes people seem to just write it off and slowly replaces their memories of him to fit the new him, which is cool also that the trance is apparently automatic for some reason as when she touches him she automatically enters a trance despite him not intending to put her in a trance. This automatic trance on touch thing is a bit weird... as he clearly doesn't put people into trances automatically any time they touch him... since he's touched Kira and Mata a lot without putting them in a trance and he had to intentionally put them in a trance earlier so... I'm not entirely sure what the rules are here. Maybe just the first time he touches someone a trance happens automatically... I can't remember if this was explained or not when he initially put Kira in a trance..." Alide admits.

"Well if it was, we're not go-" Dahlia starts and Alide cuts her off.

"-No this is important enough. We're going back to check!" she announces and Dahlia sighs. Alide begins to go back through chapters as Dahlia gets an evil grin on her face and slides out of her chair.

"Hmm... There is mention that once they've been touched they just have to be able to see the ring and then he says trance to put them back into a trance... So I guess it's just automatic on first touch and afterwards has to be intentional or so-ah!" she starts before suddenly stopping and pushing back from the chair, glancing down at Dahlia who is kneeling under the table and smiling up at her wickedly.

"Aww... You are perceptive I didn't even get to slide your thong all the way to the side before you noticed me!" she says cheerfully.

"Dahlia what the hell?" Alide asks and Dahlia pouts.

"Come on Alide! I'm getting bored... Let's do this like Lois and Blaze. You do the boring reading and meanwhile I'll tongue fuck you until you can't think! It'll be fun!" Dahlia suggests.

"No. We are not doing that. If you're getting bored though... We can stop here for now and continue more later," Alide responds and Dahlia sighs.

"Fine... but we are absolutely going to have hot lesbian sex as not real, but sort of sisters one of these reads!" Dahlia promises.

"No... we aren't. Goodbye for now!" Alide waves.