Meanwhile in Monster World, Uno Yamanaka gives her reply

After getting back home from another lesson, Uno found she got a message on her menu screen.

"That's strange. Is this another player in the game?"

Uno checked the message out.

"So someone somehow wrote a story about me and two girls have done some kinda review on it?"

And thus begins the story of Uno responding to a review of a story someone wrote about her.

“That appears to be the case. Some guy named Aidan gets trapped in a virtual world. Very creative. Has not been done to dead by this point.”

"Actually, Sword Art Online already did it. Also its "done to ****", not done to dead."

“None of these fucking options tell me anything!”

"This might have been okay if the author had made the classes something basic like warrior, mage and thief but I agree that she should have clarified what those classes are in the intro, before the reader selects them."

“Not that it matters. With that pitiful amount of chapters, I doubt anything but the first path will have enough chapters.”

"I've taken a look at these chapters and you're actually right about that. The author should focus on just the one branch."

“Let me get this straight Marcie. This is a videogame in which you play as a school girl.”

"Its called a tutorial, you dumbass."

“Who the fuck wants to play a video game about going to school!”

"Er... Persona and those Harry Potter video games or at least the early ones, the latter Harry Potter games were shit."

“That's the name of the avatar by the way.”

"I meant to put Ino. Damn, autocorrect. I gotta admit those two have a point about the spanking scenes. Its just the words "SPANK" and the occasional plea for mercy."

“Maybe If I was younger I would found that amusing, but at this point in my life I grow very weary of the generic anime fanservice trope.”

"Marcie does know this is a porn site, right? I know this author chose to name herself IWannaSpankGirls but she must have other fetishes, right?"

“The fuck kinda pacing is this?” This Uno girl is just randomly assaulting others!”

"That does not seem grammatically correct."

“This could be commentary on how the average player is unwilling to truly engage with a game. Roleplaying is a dying art and the more immersive games become the less players are willing to do their part to keep that immersion going."

"Actually, its a commentary on how Straw Hoe is totally hot for me. Yes, everyone in this story has a stupid name. I've even heard mention of people like Lord Cake and Beheading Peacesoil."

“Hm, yes. There wasn't really any focus or any narrative drive, which didn't make for an engaging experience.”

"Perhaps this author should pick up the pace a bit. I wanna fight some monsters already. Cambion gets to go on a quest to a Black Tower. If only Marcie and Gina had chose that path... they would have still ended up coming back to me because my path really is the only one deep enough according to these rules. Though, I think the author should start making sure her stories were at least twenty chapters deep before submitting a request, just an idea."