Complicated friendship and an accidental command, by Hvast

“Oh look it’s boob mouse guy. Has been a hot while, but I guess he changed his picture so I can’t call him that anymore. The current picture is some naked chick coated in flour. Which is nice but it’s no boob mouse.”

“Gina please, we are not here to rate avatars.”

“Yeah, because that would actually be entertaining. What are we reading this time? Based on the name it’s something dumb.”

“Hardly. Complicated friendship and an accidental command, by Hvast is a branch in a fairly popular up and coming story called Controlling Maisie.”

“Figures.”

“It is a tale were a girl is cursed to follow every order given to her.”

“…”

“…”

“…”

“pffft…”

“ARE YOU FUCKING KIDDING ME?”

“Not at all, Gina. I simply think a straight up proper pornographic story could be quite refreshing for a change. Especially one that...hits so close to home for you.”

“I am indeed very close to hitting you.”

READING IN PROGRESS (BGM)

“Alright, so first of. Is this bitch insane?”

“Gina, please.”

“No, seriously. She like totally offers herself up by telling this nerd about her curse! Never do that!”

“Indeed. Our protagonist is quite lucky Maisie is so foolish. Ah well, that is the conceit of the story and the first chapter.”

“Lemme guess, some loser besides tit mouse wrote it.”

“Yes, Gina. So we can not comment on it.”

“Sure, the less I have to read of this trash the better.”

"Then go on, be scum. What do you want? My name plus anything, rules are simple! Grow my tits! Make me kiss you! **** me to give you a blowjob! Make me strip naked right here!" she responded with anger of her own, tears forming in her eyes

“Ok seriously at this point she’s just asking for it.”

After all, you told yourself that she qA technically consenting... in a way.

“Meanwhile I am asking how this typo could have possible occurred.”

“Great Segway. Our main character does the classic calm down, which calm’s the dumbass down and then he does what every guy with a **** device does. Get a blowjob.”

“For the record, I never made Gina do that.”

“You totally did. With Cutie.”

“Well, that is hardly the same thing.”

“If you are done trudging up my trauma, Marcie, we are having a robotic blowjob. Seriously, you can command her to do literally anything and you tell her to give you a mechanical blowjob. The fuck’s wrong with you?”

“And we have a branching path here. Perhaps the right choice will result in something more spicy.”

“I wouldn’t count on it, Marcie. But let’s pick the option that has at least a chance of not being another blowjob.

“As you wish.”

“Ok, so in this branch Maisie has to lick her cum of her face like a cat.”

“Hmm, I must admit that I found it quite erotic.”

“What? You get off to face cum licking now, Marcie?”

“I perhaps would, Gina. Unfortunately this is a mind control story disguised as body control. Which greatly upsets me.”

“Uhu. Well, to the guys credit, he actually stops the mind control. For now.”

"Maisie, you may resume experiencing your full range of emotions now," you commanded softly, releasing her from the grip. "You don't have to remain calm."

“This of course goes about as well as you might expect. Honestly, I just can not fathom these people.”

“MC does the old forget everything nuclear option but unfortunately Maisie is still too smart for him, so we are back to telling her to calm down. This shit is getting old fast.”

“Well, it took a lot longer then it should have, but he finally decides to set some ground rules. Such as that she is not allowed to kill him or herself. It is a good start at least.”

“brrbrbrbrrrr!”

“What is it, Gina?”

“Nothing, just my regular bout of PTSD.”

“Ah, well. Eventually Maisie does indeed calm down without the employ of orders and matters progress relatively cordial between the two.”

“Not sure I would call that cordial, Marcie. Dumb bitch has a near breakdown.”

“Well, she does not like mind control. Which is good because body control is vastly superior.”

“Right. So ultimately noname MC lets her go. But Maisie is still as insane as always and actually does not go no contact with the creep. Instead she calls him and gets instantly ordered on a date with him! And with date I mean come to my house for sex!”

“There is a bit of waffling between the two. Eventually our protagonist bites the bullet and makes Maisie tell him the truth on how she feels about this whole situation.”

“Yeah, turns out this slut actually gets super turned on from getting commanded. You know, that does make a lot more sense actually.”

“Oh, another branch, Gina.”

“Only one of them sounds interesting.”

“Ah never mind. The first branch is actually from another author the second is from Hvast.”

“Wow, dickmove.”

"No, I still refuse to command you like a robot... But we can accelerate things a bit." you smiled like a wolf.

“Wolf’s do not smile.”

“It was a metaphor, Marcie. Anyway, more sex.”

“Hm I do like the sex scene or rather scenes here. Although our protagonist does not take proper advantage of the power he possesses.”

“Are you sure about that? He increases her boobs, because apparently he can do that. Ugh, I get enough of this shit with cowguy.”

“Yes, this curse also comes with reality rewrite powers. They seem weirdly specific, however. Increase in breast size is possible. Magical undressing is not.”

“Fascinating.”

“Regardless, since Maisie is clearly enjoying herself I see no reason why the protagonist would not go beyond bigger breasts.”

“Well, they don’t. Instead they are having some vanilla fun and then they top it of next morning with another blowjob. Daring today, aren’t we?”

“And as it stands, that is the last chapter of this branch.”

“Great, that’s 30 minutes I never get back:”

“Yes, we got through it rather swiftly. I do feel we should at least explore one other path, Gina.”

“I don’t.”

“We actually have to almost fall back to the beginning to pick what I assume is the more evil option.”

“This better be good.”

“Hm, our protagonist has some fun with Maisie and…”

“He has another blowjob. Then the next chapter makes him do some cosmetic changes for the ultimate goal of getting a better blowjob. You literally have reality bending powers at your disposal and can turn this bitch into whatever you want! Have some variety! You bitch!”

“Unfortunately, we do not get to see that potential variety, as this branch ends after two chapters.”

“FUCKING HELL!”

“Gina, calm down.”

“OH DON’T YOU FUCKING GO THERE!”

“And that are all chapters Hvast has submitted for this story.”

“What the fuck, titmouse? Don’t just submit your draft!”

“Classic Hvast. Just because you can submit a story after 10 chapters does not mean you should. Especially if those chapters happen to be rather short.”

“And have nothing but blowjobs in them. Fucking hell. Normally I should be happy that I get to read less but this is still pissing me off!”

“Yes, I must admit that was quite a letdown. I was looking forward to the premise. Body control is always welcome in my book but there was very little of actual body control in it.”

“Unless you count blowjobs.”

“What else is there to say? It is overall a fairly bog standard story with a protagonist that tries to not fall to the allure of the power he now possesses. Not terrible but a bit too much repetition that perhaps will get ironed out with more chapters. Unfortunately as were the story stands that is about the extend of critique that can be offered.”

“I can offer some more critique, Marcie. This would be hotter with two girls instead!”

“You mean...like hard candy?”

“Oh piss off.”