Nothing...yet.

"Hold on. Hold on."

Who are you?

"Doesn't matter. Don't you think that was a bit fast?!"

Uh...what...what do you mean?

"Well, you introduce the character then skip forward to the juicy bit. I think the reader would want a bit more build up. Tease them a little before you give them the climax. Right now you have the 'money shot' after no more than 5 minutes. That's nice and all...if you are going for a quickie, but you and I both know that is ultimately unsatisfying."

So...?

"Take your time. Build up to the climax."

O...k.

"And, for god sake, make it juicy. This climax might as well have been from a virgin for all the pop it had."

If you say so.

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Hello?

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Huh. I guess they left. Now where were we? Oh yeah. Our main character was inventing something. Hmmm. Maybe I should go back to the beginning and start over. Give more details. It couldn't hurt. Or would it be better to edit what i already have? Nah. Why bore the audience more than needed. Ok so...